I like the wording, providing it isn't too long for "artistic" purposes.
Edward
Ben Ostrowsky said the following on 1/26/2007 10:45 AM:
> Well, if it's open for a rewrite, perhaps something like:
>
> It was hopeless. Maude and Agnes had cracked top-secret
> messages during World War II, but even Bletchley Park's
> finest cryptographers were mystified by the enigmatic "008".
>
> At the risk of dissecting frogs, I think it telegraphs the context and
> puts the punchline where it belongs: at the end. It also breaks well
> into three lines.
>
> Ben
>
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